Talk:Atarius

Hey! I like the page and Atarius. You guys are super awesome = ) I changed quite a bit about the page. I didn't really change the content other than fix a few spelling errors, but a brief recap: - I split it into sections, with headers this time. It just makes it look nicer.

I don't mean to sound harsh by saying this but the article is a little bit against our policies. First off, there was a fair deal of grammar issues. This isn't my biggest concern, but please make sure to check your grammar when you finish an article. There's free sites to do that if you need a bit of help.

Also, I noticed that the article lacks a formal tone. In order to make articles look and be as factual as possible, they must be written in a formal tone. A.K.A: straight facts, nothing more. Extra opinions and input aren't required when describing what it is.

For example, this sentence: "The Prime form of transport is by Air car. These magnificent creations give the citizens the ability to travel from city to city in a mini Aeroplane. The second form of intercity transport is by heliplane which is a dual prop helicopter with a decently large cabin for roughly 12 people to comfortably transport. The final mode of transport is by railway, the railway lines have yet to be created but will be designed in a way where citizens can see all the spectacular views of Atarius in one train ride." Please notice the first and last bolded section. These reasonably opinionated sections are generally frowned upon.

Here is how I would rewrite this section: "The Prime form of transport is by flying Air Cars. The second form of intercity transport is by heliplane, a dual prop helicopter with a cabin large enough for a dozen people. The final mode of transport is by railway. The railway line is currently under construction, but will be designed to showcase views of the country" Notice I generally removed the opinionated sections and cut down on extra particles.

Overall, they're pretty minor things and easy to fix. But they're tiny details that make the wiki look nice and professional. The article itself is fine, but make sure to correct this stuff.

Also, when making an article based around the server or community edition, please include the 'Community' template in order to avoid confusion for someone who may go "hey, why isn't this in the map??"

Thanks! Synfiny (talk)syn